very nice. This Chapter, as Aquababe said, was very visual and we could really see how things went on. It;s interesting how you've portrayed the legendary Pokemon as much more sinister, deceiving characters, not like their usual stereotyped role of a friendly, helpful beast.

I didn't realise Glenys and Ripper's hotel (from EBTV) was in Hoenn! (is that the right english spelling?). It's interesting to say the least...

I think Ho-oh or Moltres will emerge in the next Chapter...maybe...