Well that was definently a developing chapter. Very very nicely done actually, beautiful.

Hmm im not really sure what to comment on.. you made some nice revelations, just be really careful how you reveal some things - because if your not careful then you'll reveal things too soon and make them too obvoius. And you need to be careful of that. I think I kind of revealed some things in my fics a bit too soon, and yeah ist just some advice from one wirter to the other.

I liked the chapter.

We shall speak more over msn.

luv ya

god bless