Hey Gavin!
It took me about three days to read the whole thing but I thing it's worth the effort. Made up Pokes were brilliant (Iseechu, Fiskmire and Girafury!!!) but I was let down byt some things.

I'm writing a fic too, I'll probably post it sometime, but the fact of Pokemon killing people just wasn't that right for me.
In my fic, all legendaries are supposed to be somehow protectors of the world. But with Entei betraying his brotherhood, for an unknown reason as of yet, and even killing Anna, something clutched into me...
But anyway. I liked it and can't wait to read the next chap!

PS: I hope we could make a crosseover sometime!

Keep it up!